I just read the piece by Ridiculous Mavis and (like most of you) loved it. As was pointed out before, the author is very good at writing dialogue and maybe even better at analyzing the muddled and contradictory emotions the characters find themselves in. I also think that having Agnes be the one who breaks up with Elin rather than the other way around is very perceptive.And the chocolate milk leitmotif, as an image for the teenage love that seems to have been lost but under the surface is still burning, is great. R.M. is a little less versed in constructing an arc of tension, sometimes things run too slow or too fast. E.g. the point at which, suddenly, Agnes supposedly realizes that she has not only fallen in love again with Elin, but has actually never stopped loving her. This seems overdone. One wonders why she has left her then in the first place. As Cheevers already noted, the text offers no real clues. And Elin's change of mind between chapters 9 and 10 also comes a bit unexpected. But all in all, a wonderful read.
If snaps is right that R.M. is no-one but Fran from "Show Me Love, Please" - with whom I exchanged quite a few emails back in 2005 - that would be great, proving that even though their web pages disappear, the FA lovers themselves will resurface somewhere, somehow.